Open Poetry #31 |
I fear |
Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
Our eyes sleep our lips meet your heartbeat harmonises with mine. You whisper that you fear this perpetual ache inside your heart. You want to rip it out but it has an alluring attraction. I fear rejection, the pain of a papercut, the tainted flow of blood and the heartbeat of a nightmare. But I stand before you to let you know that forever and a day I will not fear your love. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
good one! |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
Lovely! ~K~ |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
expressed so nice ..... Loved the heartbeats in harmony part Hope |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Vey eloquently written. I enjoyed this Kim. |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Strong, poignant, heartfelt...~P |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
no need to fear... keep it going... it is a nice place to be in regards sudhir |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kimberley~ I like the strength of your convictions woven with the tender threads of your heart~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
I like this... |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
this poem reflects a strong person - it is very well written - I liked it alot! Paul |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
nothing to fear but fear itself... sigh...this is like something I could write here...love the theme and the feeling in this |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Lovely...James |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I fear rejection, the pain of a papercut, the tainted flow of blood and the heartbeat of a nightmare. ~*~ Read this yesterday, Kim, and pondered on it... These were the strongest lines, for me, and are worthy of a second look, and another poem. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Love that second verse, it's raw and oh so warm all in the same vein....Nicely done! Eric |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
^*-*^*-*^*-*^*-*^*-*^ Thankyou all for taking the time to read my poetry, your comments are all noted and I thank you again!! ^*-*^*-*^*-*^*-*^*-*^ It is so nice to be part of the Piptalk family!! ^*Kimberley: "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" |
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