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Torch This Mocking Sky
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Torch This Mocking Sky |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I, in stare Knew depths of sky flat to feel as rolled stock blue, paper thin, Allowed to simply fool eyes Into thinking there was more beyond The cold touch of winter’s bowl Than mere truth of physics allowed, In despair, I have lit a torch Holding it to edges of this hue Wishing flames to catch And warm in me something Other than the burn Of empty Today I search For the wrinkled folds Where night and day crumble sky To begin again the fumbled find Of match For I would burn this The hateful winter’s sky [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (03-02-2004 11:17 AM).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
She does hang on, a cruel mistress and a tease... it's almost here... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Cpat Hair Enjoyed the read. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
enjoyed your words this morning, Ron M |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Spring is in the air my friend...and I've even heard we're getting another snow storm next week, and yet, to no avail...spring in all her stubborness and glory will eventually arise. Lovely write |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron...You expressed that need for warmth so well...it's even been wet and gloomy in California. As always, you write so well!! Warm hugs! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
thanks all... appreciate the comments.. it's more than winter here.. one could substitute summer for winter in this piece and it would still say what I wished to say... but yes.. Spring is around the corner..and the days now longer grow warmer.. I am always happy to see that. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Hello Ron, You are still the master at capturing that essence of the inner ache. This is stunning. Missed reading you. Corinne |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"I have lit a torch Holding it to edges of this hue Wishing flames to catch And warm in me something Other than the burn Of empty" Such an ache to this write Captain.. well done sir. Hugs~
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Today I search For the wrinkled folds Where night and day crumble sky''' ~~ awww yes, the ever dreadful last hit of winter...Spring will be a welcomed warmth....   ~~**~~ There are moments when speech is but a mouth pressed lightly and humbly against the angel's hands. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I, in stare Knew depths of sky flat to feel as rolled stock blue, paper thin, ================================= damn I love how you do that.......... have lit a torch Holding it to edges of this hue Wishing flames to catch And warm in me something Other than the burn Of empty ==================== and how you do that............ sheesh... ya had me from the title on....... very cool title and closing couplet poet sir.... very cool indeed.  Through the water ... through the rain ... to the soul of everything Wash my heart out on the stones ... and I'm almost gone. David Gray |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed  |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
WOW.... unique incredible fantastic |
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EternitysHorizon Member
since 2002-05-03
Posts 145Twilight's Orchestra |
Well Ron if you run out of matches I almost always keep a spare lighter or three around sounds like you are ready for seasons end whatever that minds Cheers Kendell "High on the Mountain, where the Sun stil Shines, and the water runs a little lazy." |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
very well written - winter just has to end soon - Paul |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Thankfully, yes, Spring should arrive on time this year. (besides, I've just put in the last of my wood) |
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J.Samm Member
since 2004-01-12
Posts 415Iloilo City, Philippines |
a very intense write...passionate with anger  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Tried to pick a favourite line Sir, but couldn't for I love them all. Excellent as usual M Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. (by Virginia Woolf) [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (03-03-2004 07:07 PM).] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
A soulful write, Ron. I felt the chill of a failed love's memory, one that whose touch should have left you warm, but somehow failed. Or is this really just about winter? LOL (and the lotus you imagined was the inspiration for that write, LOL) |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"In despair, I have lit a torch Holding it to edges of this hue Wishing flames to catch And warm in me something Other than the burn" If the weasel had just sat quietly, while you wrote...he would still be with us today.  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I, in stare Knew depths of sky flat to feel as rolled stock blue, paper thin, Allowed to simply fool eyes Into thinking there was more beyond Well heck, you just had to go and remind me! This speaks volumes to this heart of mine~ Thank you Cpat~ |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Ron, I really enjoyed this and certainly do feel like mocking the sky myself, but right now the Mocking Birds are doing that for us. They start up about 11 p.m. and go on all night long! |
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