Open Poetry #31 |
my two cents |
serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You said that it would end this way. You said I would have not a thing. You said that I'd beg you to stay. You said, you said, such cripplings. If you've learned nothing from our lives-- learn something from the death of us. Nobody can get out alive. I think I would have rathered lies and leave with pennies on my eyes of a simple copper trust-- weights of measure fluttering in the stead of starburst rust taking place profundity-- I wish to die not having seen this I see before me now... You said that it would end this way. Thus I blinked my offering-- the best coin I have ever spent-- at least I know my death is paid. Life and Lincolns- set of twins rolling rusty my two cents... |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
WOW...this sent a chill right through me!! woman, you leave me shaking my head, wishing i could find the right words to say to you... so, a will have to suffice, until i find my "two cents" |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
We've got to get you on the road... because I want to hear you reading this, and your others... to those who have a soul... |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
SereneOne, this is excellent writing!! Wish I could write like this. Hugs Ethel |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
*sigh* ... me thinks some can turn diamonds back to coal... "Reeling in the Years" comes to mind.... {"you wouldnt know a diamond if you held it in your hand"} me KNOWS you are a poetess of perfection... just look at this gem. quite the soulful write me twin. Through the water ... through the rain ... to the soul of everything |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Incredible, Serenity! I especially liked the following, but the entire poem is what worked the magic. "I think I would have rathered lies and leave with pennies on my eyes of a simple copper trust-- weights of measure fluttering in the stead of starburst rust taking place profundity-- Sadie |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Oh my goodness Karen. Oh my goodness. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Doggone it! And I'll bet you just tore this off the top of yer head. This is better than good, m'witch |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
this is so powerful - I just read - shake my head at your incredible talent - then read again and marvel at the depth of what you say - I am in awe also - Paul |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
serenity You go so far and find so much...you are an amzing person, and poet! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"You said that it would end this way. Thus I blinked my offering-- the best coin I have ever spent-- at least I know my death is paid. Life and Lincolns- set of twins rolling rusty my two cents..." Gawd Karen...how do you do this!?? Amazing write.. *and to think we may be kin folk* Hugs YOU!
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big angel hugs) God Bless You, dearest friend, your two cents are so valuable to us all, in fact, they're priceless! (sigh) Yay, I love this, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Wow Karen, you're an amazing chickie. M Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
So very true: nobody gets out alive. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
This was outstanding, fabulous, excellent and terrific! Very much enjoyed! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
thank you. Funny, but it's like the end of a horror movie--just when you think the villain is dead? She blinks. Thanks again, your words in reply to mean more than you will ever know. |
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