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surface bubbles--death by sea
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surface bubbles--death by sea |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I suppose you needed me crying "keep me all together" Did you hear me beg reprieve? "nothing same can last forever"? True--I've been a constancy a circle just beyond your reach talk-talk wasted talk-talk grieve talk-talk clinging to my knees wrap your arms around me please-- just not there, just let me breathe... rudderless oh how profound death can be without a sound weighted by the both of us talk, talk dammit-- talk-talk drown... |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
very nice piece karen made me think how terrible it is when there is nothing left to talk about ( except there being nothing to talk about) makes you miss those really nice silences two people can share Peace,  JThere is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"rudderless oh how profound death can be without a sound weighted by the both of us talk, talk dammit-- talk-talk drown..." I have "gasped" this very thing. Oddly, was thinking of it earlier. As always K, amazing. |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I knew this kind of lonliness but I didn't feel it long. For grieving the living is harder, Than grieving those who are gone. Mighty profound Lady, and sometimes when they finally talk - really is it worth listening to? This should be a plaque  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Serenity -- I really, really liked this one! Especially: "rudderless oh how profound death can be without a sound weighted by the both of us talk, talk dammit-- talk-talk drown..." The sense of rhythm it took added to the frustration expressed!  ..........jo |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
intense! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
um... ya know I like it... |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Umm, ya know I like it too! |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
ya I like it too - it just wrapped me up and spun my head and steeped me in the emotions of it - loved it Karen - Paul |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Very intense indeed Karen, having been there not to long ago myself. GorgeousMxx Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Me too! |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
serenity, Calm amid the chaos. No pretentions of understanding. No advice. You have everything you need. Doc |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks. With hugs to Doc.  "wild women don't worry--wild women don't get da blues..." |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
"wrap your arms around me please-- just not there, just let me breathe..." Had to laugh at this, knowing this suffocating feeling-It must be terribly difficult to please someone who wants to be wrapped, but wants to breathe... Where does one find the perfect median?) I love your writings. Sometimes they baffle me, but they're intriquing and thought provoking. CTS, thank you for your hospital campout comment-it made me smile. Sadie |
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