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My Greatest Fear
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My Greatest Fear |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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My Greatest Fear Give her my greetings when you meet and when you see her mellow smile but please, no words or news of me in loosely gossiped heartthrob style. Don't sell my nice, don't bare my fears, don't state uncovered thoughts I spoke or mirthy tales of lover's cheer - that's not the way I see my hopes That's not the way that she should hear. my heart fills up with her in mind Someday I'll take down the tent where I store my dreams of her so clear and I'll tell her of the time I've spent wishing I could hold her near But the space outside is my lament; when I consider how my tongue is bent with her response my greatest fear. © Eric True Ain't doin nothin at all |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well, look who I see... the poet himself. I so enjoy your work, Eric... nice to finally "meet" you! |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Very eloquent, flows smooth... nice rhymes! Grover. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
I like this one better than the other...just sort of rolls off my tongue...hugs |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
very pretty prose |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
prose? Nicely written sir... reads like a poem to me... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
nodding in relation |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Eric, this was a really well-written, lovely poem, and I especially liked your metalphors. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Eric, I love this. Straight from your heart....and into my library. Enjoyed. Chris "At one glance |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
this is a gentle flowing...singing, lulling itself into the heart....  |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Eric It is so good to SEE you! As always you touch heart with an ache of beauty and a feel of real. Enjoyed! |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
a touching poem - thanks Paul |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big angel hugs) Oh Eric, this is such a gentle and heartfelt write, sweet friend, I love your new picture too, yay, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Eric, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Eric, it is SO good to see you! love this write as well.. straight from your heart. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Someday I'll take down the tent where I store my dreams of her so clear and I'll tell her of the time I've spent wishing I could hold her near'''' such is the ache of love....sigh....relating well to this.... ~~**~~ |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"no words or news of me in loosely gossiped heartthrob style." oh, a heartache in tune with the harshness of reality |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Many many thanks to all who commented on this piece.....I surely appreciate the kind words and positive input. Martie, Sunshine, Paula and many others of my favorite poet buddies I am so pleased to hear from you. Eric Ain't doin nothin at all |
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