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You Could Tell
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You Could Tell |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio 
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You could tell, as they promenade on this blessed february morn, as i swear i heard the robin's premature window song, you could tell, as they huddle together keeping warm, as the streams of sun reminiscent of september's fall, are just temporary reprieve of winter afterall, you could tell, as they watch with awe, the cloud formations that morph together changing faces and places, that parallel the waves beneath, as they rise and fall, or see their smiles at the shoreline's panarama, in childlike wonder of the littered shells, as they're captured in a bird's view from the boardwalk's crowded floor, you could tell, the ones that have surpassed victoriously, both the rainbows and the storms, in a shroud of almost holy light, as the sun forms a canope round them on this amber dawn, you could tell, the joyous ones looking head on in the face of tomorrow, meeting eyes, unified, in the splendor of such simple morn, from the ones sitting the fence of procrastination and indecision, biding time, waiting for signs feeling weary, weathered and torn. *****could YOU tell? which side the blonde sits at, afterall?  **************** |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Very nice, especially liked the last stanza! Grover. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
What is that statement...? something about a book and it's cover?  Show and tell... or just tell as it is. I enjoyed this very much, Michelle... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome write |
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dingusjr Member
since 2003-09-24
Posts 415Missouri |
Nice, nice job! Enjoyed. |
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bklynboy Senior Member
since 2002-12-15
Posts 660florida |
You could tell....this is pretty good! |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
sounds like someone has been outside looking in for a very long time! just my opinion, .... I, myself, have been in the grass below the fence looking for the early worm .... there is always tomorrow! *S |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I enjoyed this very much. excellent.  Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Beautiful images and feelings intertwined....You have placed the reader right there/here.... one moment-at-a-time |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
another write to remember, Mish, my library enjoys accepting another offering |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
thanks for taking the time to comment |
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PassionandFun Member
since 2003-07-30
Posts 60 |
I can tell - that the blonde always sits on the correct side of the fence.....nice job... Passion |
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Krishankins
since 2002-06-23
Posts 972Texas |
Nice write! I, too, liked the last stanza best. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
thanks for finding this one,again jeff |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Excellent write. Enjoyed. Chris For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart. It was not my lips you kissed, but my soul. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Of course you can tell, she's the one in your face, in a good way! ahaha~ Most excellent Michele~ |
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