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DavePage
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0 posted 2004-02-28 08:02 PM



Expectation
Lighting dark electric emotions lighting
Desire

Movement
Slowing raising expectation
Lighting

Waves
Asking 2 and 4 pence
To dance

Along an escapade
That dances the brain
Climbing

To
Uncomitted promises
Extorted

On a bed
Of roses

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iliana
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1 posted 2004-02-28 11:35 PM


You painted quite a dimensional piece, Dave -- loved the lines:

"To
Uncomitted promises
Extorted"

Grover
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2 posted 2004-03-22 01:19 PM


Very good, Dave!
DavePage
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3 posted 2004-03-22 01:33 PM


Grover, iliana

Odd bits of memory and words still keep erupting as I once again explore unfinished business, the torn away bridges of communication where we stand on oppostite sides of a river bank, arguing about who said we meant to go to a dance rather than advance and tore the bridge down in temper.

Thanks

Dave

Sadelite
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4 posted 2004-03-24 10:48 PM


Dave,
   It's a shame bridges are burned in temper or stubborness.  I'm glad you clarified the poem in a response.  I understood it before, but now, it is more completely visualized. Incidently, thanks for posting at one of my poems.  Speaking of bridges...
I believe I may have misunderstood your response and written mine inappropriately.  
  I enjoy your poems.  I don't always understand the depth, but there is always something that I take with me.
                     Sadelite

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5 posted 2004-03-25 03:09 AM


I REALLY LIKE THIS ONE


passing shadows
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6 posted 2004-03-25 03:15 AM


cool write...I understand it well
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