"2 Flutes and Broken Glass"

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Brad_Smith
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since 2004-01-09

Posts 70
Dallas, Texas

0 posted 2004-02-24 05:50 AM

One gift

2 dreams

Seperated

Better for Bride
than broken
said she

On Mother's Mantle
My Millenium's Faith
belongs in my home

once again

to shine
awaiting a toast

Irish Crystal
Etched Sunshine
Sparkles
Somewhere

Seperated by fears
and tears
to fill two flutes
with joy

With her father's permission
The match made

They would say,
cheers
"To Life!"
"To Life!"
L'CHAIM!!
(pronounced L-khyme)

One Broken
One kept to shine!

Mazal Tav!

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

1 posted 2004-02-24 08:53 AM

and a great custom/tradition and perhaps superstition? Yes? Wonderful write

Copperbell
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since 2003-11-08

Posts 956

2 posted 2004-02-24 11:08 AM

interesting, I don't know this custom

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

3 posted 2004-02-24 11:15 AM

loved the line:

"Irish Crystal
Etched Sunshine"

nice description

Ericc
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since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

4 posted 2004-02-24 11:27 AM

Very creative.

Great write!

Eric

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

5 posted 2004-02-24 12:47 PM

Yes, a lovely poem, so much tradition woven into this one.

the segment with "than" is a bit confusing to me, for than means a comparison...I'm wondering if you mean "then" I guess it could be a comparison that the crystal is better to be given for a bride than to be broken, I just want to be sure because it could be better for a bride, then broken as in the traditional ending to the ceremony when something is broken on the floor by the feet of the "groom" I think...my memory of the scenes in movies is blurry

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

6 posted 2004-02-24 01:04 PM

that's neat...I like this write

thanks for sharing

sea_of_okc
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since 1999-06-15

Posts 568
Oklahoma City, OK, USA

7 posted 2004-02-24 01:43 PM

I actually have attended one Jewish wedding and One Barmitzvah (sp?) I like the way you relate the traditions here. Great imagery.

Jamie
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since 2000-06-26

Posts 3168
Blue Heaven

8 posted 2004-02-24 02:29 PM

Enjoyed reading this very much.

Check your mail

J

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

Snow

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since 2000-10-16

Posts 1170
desert flower looking for rain

9 posted 2005-01-01 05:23 PM

ok ... so i had to go looking for your work....i'm intrigued.
i like what you wrote here, but i don't think i'm seeing it as the others are.

to me, the voice of the piece is crushed and aching..

but perhaps that's just my frame of mind today. either way i like it.

snow

"so I wait for you like a lonely house
till you will see me again and live in me.
Till then my windows ache"
p.neruda

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