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David2
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0 posted 2004-02-23 06:55 PM



Fingertips

The memory of beauty lingers long
Though absence wields a telling, trying blow
And portraits of the mind once rich and strong
Must alter as do mounds of drifting snow.
So too your face dissolves into a haze
As so it must lest madness seize domain
And force this soul to suffer endless days
Of recollections full of haunted pain.
But triumph overcomes such tragedy
As your return is met with grateful cries
Relieved of long and dreadful misery
As flawless beauty soothes these tired eyes

For truly you were granted beauty blessed
When God's own fingertips your soul caressed.

© Copyright 2004 David William La Belle - All Rights Reserved
Sadelite
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1 posted 2004-02-23 07:58 PM


I'm not much of a romantic, but this pulled it out of me!  I can understand why you revised this beauty.  I hope it draws the attention it deserves. Excellent.
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Grover
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2 posted 2004-03-22 07:40 PM


Yea... hope a few others read this nice poem.
iliana
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3 posted 2004-03-22 11:57 PM


Dave2, this was a beautiful poem!
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4 posted 2004-03-23 02:08 AM


beautiful beautiful beautiful!!!!


snow

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5 posted 2004-03-23 02:47 AM


well done...nice portrait
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6 posted 2004-03-23 06:11 PM


Very well written

Chains of leaving and returning

Dave

Martie
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7 posted 2004-03-23 09:22 PM


Dave...I understand where this is coming from...it is healing poetry.  Thank you!
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