Open Poetry #31 |
bruised ballad |
mytuesdaywishes Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 254a voice from the musicbox |
found your mittens in the frozen creek crystal branches and a scarlet cheek scattered ballads and an angel in your place the idle snowdrifts took the dismal lead while you're living life the world gains speed and carried you though your faults would lose the race found your beloved by the fireside a broken promise and a battle cry shifted ashes and a bruised and blackened eye the angry fire whispered hatefully we burn the things we love so carelessly and one last cinder fell in the name of heaven nigh found you crying on her lonely stone aging flowers and a chicken bone wishing hard for anything but now the bleeding letters of her lifetime read "many times before this i was dead" and regret and loss overwhelmed your sorry brow joy has its own justice. and dreams are languid and lawless. and everything bows to beauty, when it's fierce and when it's flawless... |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
mytuesdaywishes, such a very powerful write…loved the last stanza…what a fantastic ending to such good poetry |
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Endlessecho Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 398I live within myself |
I was going to back back pages to see any poems that had 0 or only 1 response to read them and see if maybe it was a really great poem that just fell through the cracks. That is definitely what I found here. I had to put another response because this is a beautiful poem. And I agree - a very powerful write. I love the imagery here and the thoughts conveyed. |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Exemplary! Grover. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
WOW. This had a really story in it and was wonderfully written. WOW! (I especially liked the rhythm of it -- I heard music with it.) |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I find myself looking out for your work...fantastic! Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
Ahhh impressive tues ...this i s a Keeper
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
YOU are so very good. I'm a new fan. Love your work, lady. Just love it. |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Even better the second time around! Great work here... keep it up! Grover. |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
This is really powerful. ~sky Hold on, if you feel like letting go |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
Amazing piece! Very powerful, beautiful. Thank you for sharing, this is going in my library. W.W. |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
very powerfully and well done!!! Paul |
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