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Insight Looking Out |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
I have a few words Caught in a black bag precise I’ll not let them out Oh yes they’ve been free To scatter cross fields of print And bantered about But now they’re confined In that old black bag precise Insight looking out I tied them up tight And wear the bag on my belt Near as I go out Little daggers of words To make the anger well felt Said in a bold shout The give bloodless wounds Angered they are never precise Speaker turns to lout Action words blurred They’re trumpets calling to arms Word dice you’ve tossed out I’ve tied them up tight Though Carlin call them no harm I’ll not let them out You can if you might Sputter them with your raging Said in a bold shout Not me anymore They’re in that black bag precise Woven deep dark stout Gloom |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Enjoyed the imagery here! Grover. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Gloom -- excellent poem. That black bag has been known to cause ulcers, though. The poem really carried a depth of anger without them all the same and was very moving. Hope all is well your way.  |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I've tied them up tight... Carlin's words... sometimes they need releasing even if to an empty audience(at least that's what some Dr. told me once)  M |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
in the bathroom in front of the mirror is a good place to let them out |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Grover, Pleased you enjoyed Thank you, iliana, The words themselves actually cause no ulcers, The emotion and anger that comes with them do. This is about an overheard conversation, As much as anything else, Sitting in a coffee shop and realizing the table new to me Should have washed their mouths out with soap (but I doubt if they even washed their hands) Thank you, Nakdthoughts Glad you like this, These 7+ words are best when alone and striking your finger with a hammer. Unfortunately They are all too common of usage Thank you, passing shadows For me said in the darkness (since I don’t cast as nice a reflection as you) Gloom |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
You, Professor, are too much of a gentlemen to do anything but carry a well woven black bag precise. Your poem and character are much appreciated. ~Sadie~ BTW, I noticed a pattern of rhyming. Does this type of poetry have a particular name? |
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