Open Poetry #31 |
TANKA No. 1 - Truth of Wind |
iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Amidst an air of evergreen, the fledgling learns the scent of flying, and shakes off downy newness, young one learns the truth of wind. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) God Bless You, dearest friend, this reminded me so much of my Cherokee knowledge I hold dear given to me from my ancestors, sweet friend, how kinship is a central part of our doctrines, which we call family "Tiospaye", and it is an extended family that is more universal that goes beyond blood relatives, but includes the thunder, the stones, the animals, so much more, and that we hold obligations true for each individual holding several roles in society, including a mother (Ina) and father (Ate) providing for the children! (smiles) Yay, may the children learn to fly by listening to dear heart, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jo, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful!! I love this! Hugs~ ~ Whatever our souls are made of, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh .....YOU GO! YES! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Noah -- thank you so much sweet heart! I really am grateful for the information you gave about the Cherokee -- I find that so very interesting! Hugs to you, friend.....jo |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Dixie girl -- you are so sweet with your comments. I'm experimenting a little with my writing, can you tell? ......hugs, jo |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Nancy Lee, I'm glad you did -- I loved yours about the sisters! .......hugs, jo |
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Ravenwolfvoyager Member
since 2003-12-25
Posts 326 |
Iliana, you are truly going to have to stop you now have me addicted, these are really great. I hope that you plan on doing a series!!!!!!!!!!! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Beautifully written, excellent message. Thanx Iliana. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I love this, iliana. Aren't these short verses fun to write? Hugs Ethel |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
iliana...Very well done...Paul "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hi Jo I absolutely loved this, so very beautiful. Take care......Sue I am in motion |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Wonderful, just wonderful. Loved it so much. Hugs and Smiles, Marti I take no credit for my poems. Although I write them, I feel |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Iliana You are magic Love Dave Amidst an air of evergreen, the fledgling learns the scent of flying, and shakes off downy newness, young one learns the truth of wind. *********************************** Wind flying a young bird Evergreen warmth to fly for the feel of currents and the smell of currents to learn more of the wind |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
What a sensational rendition of wind... Enjoyed. TD |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Truly, a beautiful poem! Grover. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Jo, this is very beautiful. Shows your spirit of observation and how you capture the essence. Love, Margherita |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
iliana another beautiful Tanka... enjoyed this one also ________ice ><> |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
the truth of wind yes something to learn we can never caatch for sure nice tanka |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
such a peace when reading this....I needed that! ~~**~~ |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
iliana, great mixture of the senses...loved the flow...good write |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
I like the way you do these - - - never tried them, guess I need too although never could do anything structured... Very nicely written... jwesley |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
kind of like water off a duck's back? The freshness in this appeals to every sense! Spectacular write, Jo. Are you sure we're sisters? Sadie HOW COULD i have MISSED this gem? Are you saving hard copies of these Jo? You must organize these into a notebook with plastic protective sheets. You need to have a set for each person in your immediate family and,well...one for me, too? |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
I enjoyed the picture this created in my mind. Well done Iliana. believe in what your heart feels... |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Nicely done. I like the way you portray it as a scent, a feel in the air. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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sea_of_okc Senior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 568Oklahoma City, OK, USA |
I love the feel of this. Excellent job. Tanka very much for sharing it |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Amidst an air of evergreen, the fledgling learns the scent of flying, and shakes off downy newness, young one learns the truth of wind. Nice feeling here that you have captured, Jo...So much can be said , so many feelings evoked in so few words. |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
very much enjoyed |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
like it so much, i accidently double posted! oops |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
OK, now you've done it, m'friend, inspired me. LOL, I used to write Tankas a few years ago. Guess its time to dust off the old quill and try one again. I enjoyed this very much. namaste |
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