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Sadelite
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since 2003-10-11

Posts 2519

0 posted 2004-02-19 07:04 AM

Naked and wringing wet with
Little hope to dry,
White terry cloth heart, saturated,
No more room for cry.

The muscle strength in wrist and fingers
Wrung the cotton with last ditch might.
Patterns rang of echoed drips becoming
Scintillated drops in morning light.

A breeze of hush brushed raw cheek
With flects of sunshines warming heat.
Emerging steps to fresh outdoors,
To hook soul on clothesline, bittersweet.

Air of lilac skirted under
Fabric warmed and dried.
Looping threads had hardened,
Softness gone, died.

The wing-ed stiff flew from line
To a muddied mire.
Later unburied by a treasure hunter,
Who laundered it,
Fluffed it in the dryer.

[This message has been edited by Sadelite (02-21-2004 07:20 PM).]

Endlessecho
Member

since 2003-09-05

Posts 398
I live within myself

1 posted 2004-02-19 10:06 AM

Ah!! I love this metaphor. beautiful and realistic look at love. True picture painted. Loved your word usage. I liked the last stanza. Well-written.

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

2 posted 2004-02-19 10:13 AM

OhLittleSadieLady~

This is soooooooo good~

'Air of lilac skirted under
Fabric warmed and dried'

Beautiful worded-imagery here~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

3 posted 2004-02-19 09:19 PM

Enjoyed this very much, Sadie! A bittersweet write with a happy ending! Just the way I like it. hugs to you

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

4 posted 2004-02-19 09:48 PM

(big angel hugs) This is soooooo beautiful, sweet friend, the ending made me cry with a smile as love can truly always be found no matter how dirty or stained ones heart is! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sadelite, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

Grover
Senior Member

since 2004-01-27

Posts 1967
London, ON, Canada

5 posted 2004-02-19 09:55 PM

Very nice! Grover.

Sadelite
Member Elite

since 2003-10-11

Posts 2519

6 posted 2004-02-19 10:26 PM

Endlessecho,
   I'm glad you liked the metaphors.  I can blame them on my dryer that went on the blink. After about two weeks of scratchy line dried towels, I better appreciated my dryer!
                Sadie

Marge,
  I loved your song-like greeting.   You flatter me with your words!   Thank you.
                 Sadie

iliana,
   I'm glad you liked the happy ending.  I think it would have been a better poem if I left it hanging for the reader's imagination, but I'm a sucker for a happy ending, so I filled it in.   Besides, I just had to find a way to use that scratchy dry towel feeling somewhere...

Sadelite
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since 2003-10-11

Posts 2519

7 posted 2004-02-19 10:32 PM

Noah,
   Cry a smile...I like that!  Thank you for checking this one out.   I haven't had the time during the week to respond to many, if any--I really miss reading your poetry.   I'll try to catch some of it and others during the weekend.  Time has been scarce--probably I shouldn't even write my own poetry, but it is a habit!  Take care.
           Sadie

Grover,
    I'm glad you were able to read it and comment.   I truly enjoy your work-it has a natural flow to it.   I will try to catch up some on my responses during the weekend...
Take care.
               Sadie

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