Open Poetry #31 |
Screaming Lady on the A Train |
inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
Toss a cookie to the caterpillars let them eat cake can we expect to heal the world on day old bread? stop eating meat war will cease don't you see this too? i'm a bucket pouring paint diluting dreams watered-down mid-aged clown a full moon scattering her light below catch me from this throne they're siphoning my glow paradox, convulution weaver of webs knitting confusion pollyanna visions sink like bricks upon a dream's conclusion i'd never recognize my face if the miror weren't shattered afterall. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Michelle, you have a “light warrior spirit” I can tell and this poem captures the "cry" and it is great. Love, Margherita |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Dang I liked this one Michelle! Has anyone ever told you, you have a real talent? I’m sure they have After I read this and looked back at the title, I just had to laugh... in a good way... This was just too great! Thanks! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
so much said here, and much thought within the pauses between the lines you're an awesome lady, true to yourself, sharing with the world You should think of publishing |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Oh yeah!!!! "i'd never recognize my face if the miror weren't shattered afterall." Mirror fragments reflecting the so many "me's" in between angles and angels... wholeness's illusion shattered fullness facing this way and that. Oh yes, Michele, keep at it.... whole or in pieces .... a beauty ~P |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
i'm a bucket pouring paint diluting dreams watered-down mid-aged clown a full moon scattering her light below catch me from this throne they're siphoning my glow Michele, I love this. You never cease to amaze me with your writing!! You are good!! Hugs Ethel |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
wholeness's illusion shattered fullness facing this way and that. YES!!!! this is like this isnt it? thanks choshi thanks for reading boys and girls, and relating and the nice thoughts you've sent |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Michele - fine words from a poet goddess... BC |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
"pollyanna visions sink like bricks upon a dream's conclusion" ...such a vivid line and what a jolt back into reality... |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
yeah boy! Liked this a whole bunch. If I stopped eating meat so war would end, I'm afraid it'd only end because there'd be so many animals around there'd be no where to fight! You're a wonder with words, my friend... loved it all... jwesley |
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J.Samm Member
since 2004-01-12
Posts 415Iloilo City, Philippines |
entertaining...and if you read more deeply into the lines, that's when the real fun begins. splendid! |
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bklynboy Senior Member
since 2002-12-15
Posts 660florida |
I remember that screaming lady. She sat next to me one fine day. Gotta love the A train, fond memories of it all the way from Rockaway to the big apple |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
thanks for taking the ride with me |
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