Open Poetry #31 |
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She Is |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven ![]() |
She’s the nearly imperceptible breath in a whispered confession- the first light of each new day the ache that grows with evening shadows and the hope that follows them to sleep She’s the fleeting sweetness of a snowflake kiss-the joy found in the chasing the intimacy of walking alone in summer rain- the restoration gathered along the way She’s a song never written a poem still waiting to be understood the colour love gives spring to summon brightness from winter’s gray- the scent of life rising from the earth She’s the sound of a train in the distance softly saying goodbye-goodbye until it’s just the moon and I- She is gone and we are waiting for dreams to fill the measure of the night [This message has been edited by Jamie (02-13-2004 12:20 AM).] |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Jamie -- this was exquisite! Puttin' it in the vault! |
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dingusjr Member
since 2003-09-24
Posts 415Missouri |
Yes, Jamie....VERY nice! |
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muted![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
wow, so soft, lulling, beautiful! |
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Skyfire![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
This is just too beautiful ![]() ![]() Horses are my life |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Very lovely, should be put in a mans manual on how to love a woman! ~ARH ![]() love and hugs Open your eyes, open your mind, open your heart, let me come in and show you love.....~ARH |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Jamsey, really I wish you'd write more often or post more often m'friend, I miss reading you. I have a lil suggestion though, hope you don't mind. I've read a few times.. once as it is, the second time without "she is" in the first 3 stanzas. I feel it's too repetitious and takes away from the poem and it seemed to flow better without. But...that of course is just my opinion. Wondermous as always m'friend ![]() Mee Mee heh. Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Jaime this is just lovely and surely will take her breath away when she reads |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Jamie Wonderful images in this...fresh and full of heart. Good to see you posting! |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Thanks to each of you- Taking time to let someone know you were there is important and not always possible- I'm glad you took the time. Mmy- I have it 4 different ways- one of which is as you suggested, and is actually how I was going to post it. Thanks dear. There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Jamie Jamie Jamie.... nuff said eh? ![]() |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Extremely good work! Grover. |
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