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Water Lily
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Water Lily |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving 
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The water lily sinks heavy in rounded belly where muddied waters stagnate. Waiting for the movement and dining endlessly on lotus rice and air till the river runs clear. And how petals float atop drowning roots breaking the tension of strong surfaces ..breaking.. a lifetime of cycles. To plant the seed too deep is to suspend it between birth and all those secret places where im drawing parallels. all those sacred spaces where dying gardens grow. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Dawn~ This is vividly rich in delicate imagery~ You are so talented sweetie~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*` ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Muted -- this was outstanding. Applause, applause! |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
This was great Dawn! Yes, sometimes a kind of, survival mode, can come in handy... When the ground is parched, and there’s no rain in sight We just have to remember that the skies will eventually open, and gush forth And the crops, once again, will rise... Thanks Dawn |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Take a bow...miss lilly of the garden of poets... Beautiful and rich....taste like dark creamy chocolate! ~ARH  love and hugs Open your eyes, open your mind, open your heart, let me come in and show you love.....~ARH |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I love those ending lines! |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
To plant the seed too deep is to suspend it between birth and all those secret places where im drawing parallels. all those sacred spaces where dying gardens grow. Dawn, I loved all of it, but this part just really summed it all up. Just beautiful writing, lady. Hugs Ethel |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Vivid imagery, beautiful write.... with the soft touch of mystery. Love, Margherita  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Such a delicate mix of beauty and melancholy. Fabulous writing Dawn. |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Delicate as the lily in the pond. Wonderful Dawn. believe in what your heart feels... |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
To plant the seed too deep is to suspend it between birth Some great lines in this one, but I particularly like the ones above. This is a "keeper" for sure! Nicely done. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Wow dawn, the water runs deep....hugsssss ~~**~~ |
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illusion Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 296 |
You use such excellent descriptions and images. I like this very much. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"To plant the seed too deep is to suspend it between birth and all those secret places where im drawing parallels. all those sacred spaces where dying gardens grow." Now that is some good writing! "sit on top of the world and tell me how you feel...'cause what you feel is what I feel for you.." |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
Marge: thank you marge, to be called "talented", wow, makes me speachless. Iliana: thank you dear lady Richy: hi buddy...yes, eventually the skies will open...hopefully, it wont flood those crops ARH: mmmmm...chocolate...thank you dixie: thank you so much for being hereEthel: thats my favourite part too...tnanks for the hug Margherita: you are a joy to have around, thank you for your support Blues: delicate is exactly how i wanted it to come across, thank you for noticing Scorpio: thank you Mysteria: thank you, a "keeper", wow, thats a wonderful thing for you to say greeneyes: thank you for the hug, and yes, sometimes the water runs toooo deep LOl illusion: thank you so much for visiting Susan: thank you so much |
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