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Open Poetry #31

This New

Kazm
Member

since 2003-11-13

Posts 99

0 posted 2004-02-12 03:10 PM

Suddenly the room is shaped wrong. Or
am I
shaped
wrong?
We were comfortable, now nothing fits
Your eyes don’t rest easy on me anymore;
   strange new angles
                      in your glance
Your voice surged from laughing friend
            to serious,
       to intense,
then something else
And so the world redefines us in an instant
no more easy
                 company
            our friendship opened like paint and
  spread to
cover this new       form,
     envelop this      new space,
color this new
love

Kaz

Grover
Senior Member

since 2004-01-27

Posts 1967
London, ON, Canada

1 posted 2004-02-12 03:22 PM

Very good poem! I like the way you present it! Grover.

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

2 posted 2004-02-12 03:25 PM

WOW! Excellent write Kaz!
Love the presentation as well.
Hugs~

  ~ Whatever our souls are made of,
      his and mine are the same. ~

choshi
Senior Member

since 2004-01-01

Posts 1184
New York

3 posted 2004-02-12 03:47 PM

I really appreciate how you convey this relation between changing feelings and your perceptions of the environment....beautiful integration! ~P

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

4 posted 2004-02-13 12:55 PM

And so the world redefines us in an instant

And nothing will ever be the same. *S* That can be a bit disconcerting... but isn't it wonderful? *S*

I like this very much! *S*

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