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Teen Poetry #7

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Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2003-10-14 06:41 AM

Surrender to the darkness
That dwells once again
   Inside me.
Invading every thought
It never lets me be
  Never a break.
There’s no escaping it
It follows me everywhere
  Living in my head.
Barely enough time to breathe
Before I’m running once again
   From that cloud.

"I'm tired of being what you want me to be."~Linkin Park

dertah
Senior Member

since 2003-06-18

Posts 584

1 posted 2003-10-14 10:41 AM

good onnnnnnneeeeeeeeee.

Silent Evincar
Member

since 2003-07-22

Posts 179
Here There and Places Between

2 posted 2003-10-14 07:25 PM

How clouds can cause such a distress is beyond me. I guess sometimes you just have to run from something.

NJS

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

3 posted 2003-10-14 08:59 PM

I like the first and last line, it kinda made it seem intelligent. I'm guessing that's the right word, but yeah you know what I mean. Great work. ~Jess

"Some of us think holding on makes us strong; but sometimes it is letting go." -Herman Hesse

SilentTears
Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

4 posted 2003-10-15 10:33 AM

I really like this one. Though, I'm not sure where you got the idea for the title, but I think that's what I like most about it. Very nice work. Loves.

*I figured out that trust was just my one mistake...*

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