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Almost Nothing |
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muchos Member
since 2003-11-29
Posts 102 |
Watching you with a blank stare upon your face Sends chills up my spine You give me the impression that Im not worth your time Oh empty heart, oh mindless soul Just tell me what to do. I have these thoughts, these empty feelings Please tell me they wont come true I want to be your princess I want to take care of you You gave me your cold shoulder While I gave you my warmth But for some reason inside myself I wasnt good enough. If you want to be away Then take the time you need But tell me things I need to hear Because your making my heart bleed Oh empty heart, oh mindless soul Just give me what I need I burst into tears In this time of need found death I shed all my fears But I want you far away Take my heart you filthy man And try to make it come clean I will be washed away of sins tonight For I fear im almost nothing |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
I sincerely hope that this isn't something that you're going through right now. If it is, however, I may have some helpfu words for you. I gather from your poem that this person of your affection seems to have turned from you and negleted you emotionaly. This is quite common and with younger people, it almost always goes without expaination. Often, the person being neglectful doesn't know why they're doing it or even that they're doing it at all. I can assure you, though, that it has nothing to do with you "not being good enough". Something about this persons desires or feeling most likely has shifted to a place they may not include you right now. It's often temporary...sometimes not. Like I said, the person usually doesn't even realize it's happened or that anything's different with them. Telling them is a must, but sometimes they become defensive about it out of guilt after it's been brought up. I really hope I haven't made you feel worse, but I thought your may like a little insight into what's probably really going on. The poem was very good. If it's wasn't, I wouldn't have been able to gather such a good point of view on the situation...good luck and keep writing. Jeremy Be it in the truest form, or a desperate lack thereof, fail not to understand that the inspiration is love. |
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muchos Member
since 2003-11-29
Posts 102 |
thanks for the reply, i am just trying to go through a situation right now. filled with lots of confusion. i appreciate the insight. thanks for taking the time to read and write so much. i hope you enjoyed it. Ashley |
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blueyedlioness Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 289USA |
It sounds like you need a hug.  Good job on this... you could check some of the spelling, but it's very well done. Believe in yourself, and be happy with you. That way, if he's not... it's his problem. Follow your heart.  -Lioness |
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