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trying to reach on |
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sweet_lost_palestinian1 Member
since 2004-01-08
Posts 90 |
Having such great heart! having such a great life! feeling peoplefeel you heart! like having such desire into your life! meeting new people in the greatest world.. with people who have the greatest smiles trying to reach on for miles to see the sunlight of the world . you love the world and especially yourself but when you meet the person you love you seem everything so different like you taste the world's heaven.. people can sometimes hurt you. but remember ,they will never hate you ----------------- hope you like it ..enjoy with all my love and respect |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
lovely hon, you do express your self nicely hugsss Lauren~ ~~**~~ |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
I like it. I agree with ^^^^^! ~Vampire Kisses  I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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Essential Distress Junior Member
since 2004-01-22
Posts 33 |
well..... it dosnt seem any different to the other poems you've written. its really hard to read, because you dont have a set meter, and its obviously supposed to rhyme... sort of. it starts with a standard enough meter... and then you invert it.... try to either have it all rhyme, or none at all. you just confuse the reader by changing it. |
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sweet_lost_palestinian1 Member
since 2004-01-08
Posts 90 |
hey..well ummm i dont know what to say ,i try but i guess im just into more getting my point up..soo well umm thanks anyway |
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