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Keeping it inside
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Keeping it inside |
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PrincessNets Member
since 2002-10-30
Posts 103NewYork, USA |
Can't stop these tears Can't sleep anymore Don't wanna cry Don't wanna feel this way Does anyone else feel like crying? I feel so alone Like no one cares Wish that I Could control these emotions SO hard, living life Day to day, minute by minute Holding it all in Feeling like I might burst Now it all spills out And you know what I'm about I am exposed and bare It's a scary thought Wanna hold it all back Can't do that now You pull it out Won't let me hold it in Don't wanna feel Don't wanna hurt You make me feel You bring it all out So now, Can't stop these tears Can't sleep anymore |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
i like how you ended the poem with the same thought that you started it out with. ummm...throw in some rhyming or original metphors/imagery and it would be really really good. it was pretty good though. -alex |
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Snickers123 Member
since 2004-05-07
Posts 94United States-Iowa |
I agree with the last post, but it was a good poem. ~*.:Leah:.*~ |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
 ~Alli~ Happy Holidays! |
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