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Missing You Tonight
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Missing You Tonight |
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Sweetpoet16m4u04 Member
since 2002-11-10
Posts 153Ma, U.S.A |
Missing You Tonight Here I sit alone in my bed While visions and thoughts of you danced in my head. I’m missing you tonight It would make me so happy just to have you in sight I think that I’m missing your smile the most I would do anything just to hold you close. Being away from you for days is just too much It’s because you have that magic touch. The stars are in the sky They cannot compare to the diamonds in your eye, And the full moon is peeking out Please give me a chance to see what true love is about. Well my eyes are beginning to shut So I guess I have to say Goodnight These feelings will continue to grow like the deepest cut As you are the one that I’m missing tonight. |
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peachesNcream Senior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 513Ocean Of Tears |
This poem was really sweet! If you were seriously thinking of someone at the time, you should let them read this poem! Good work! ~Jess  "Some of us think holding on makes us strong; but sometimes it is letting go." -Herman Hesse |
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peachesNcream Senior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 513Ocean Of Tears |
This poem was really sweet! If you were seriously thinking of someone at the time, you should let them read this poem! Good work! ~Jess "Some of us think holding on makes us strong; but sometimes it is letting go." -Herman Hesse |
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sweet_lost_palestinian1 Member
since 2004-01-08
Posts 90 |
wow...i never knew that guyz were that sweet...lolol...im sorry no fence..well uumm this poem is oo good keep it up and keep wrting and wrtiing i wanna read from u alwayz. |
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skyshine 
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
That's so sweet! Your poems have a lot of passion and emotion in them. Great work!!  ~sky Hold on, if you feel like letting go |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
Wow, excellent poem. I can't find a thing wrong with it. Beautiful, thank you for sharing, this is going in my library. W.W. |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
I really like this, the sentiments hit home at this time. Thanks for sharing. ~Liz~ "Time has told me not to ask for more, one day our ocean will find its shore" ~Nick Drake |
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Sweetpoet16m4u04 Member
since 2002-11-10
Posts 153Ma, U.S.A |
Thanks for all the wonderful comments from all of you!! I'm so glad my stuff is well liked! |
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blood_red_summer Junior Member
since 2004-01-31
Posts 20 |
i have a query... why after the first three stanza's using a ryhming scheme where each line ryhmed the one preceding it why did you switch it in the fourth? in the fourth the ryhme went like this sbbskdb 1 sknfdjsn 2 sklnvdlsdn 1 lsdnf 2 the numbers representing the ryhming why would you do that and the piece could use some work work on your imagery sorry if this sounds harsh, im just calling what i see |
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aussie teen Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396Australia |
this is amazing...... keep on writing coz u got real talent and if you were thinking of someone definitly give it to them to read.... it is sooooo sweet...... love the work... Mel this is me.... like it or not.... |
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SweetStephanie Junior Member
since 2003-12-29
Posts 18Alabama, |
great work i love it i just read it to my b/f and he loves it too ~~~~~~Stephanie~~~~~~~ **Sweet*Stephanie** |
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