Teen Poetry #7 |
Alone |
PassionatelyRomantic Member
since 2004-01-24
Posts 190 |
Alone the Sand of Time We walk alone the sand of time, as I close my eyes and envision, the inevitable crime, of my heated lover's heart. A gentle bead of sweat rolls down my brow, and the invigorating taste of salt fills my senses, as my lover's heart breaks her vow, with an exquisite suitor. Her stare is but the Gulf of Mexico, beautiful- just before the waning sun meets horizon. Eyes radiating like a distant light house- iredescently aglow, like a distant constelation of stars. Her soft touch carresses my body, as her hair whips about, striking like a whip against my nude body, and across my well-worn face. Our bodies are silhouetted, 'gainst the canvas of the sea, as love requited, is expressed through thee. We stand there dignified in the nude, bound only by the hands of time, We happily embrace the romantic mood, as we silently exchange goodbyes. Passion overwhelms thee, as the sand of time is washed away, by the relentless sea, that truley gives life to you and me. |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
much better than most of the poems on here. i enjoyed the imagery and metaphors. ah, your writing is refreshing. please keep posting. -alex now im alone, but not lonely like before |
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BabieDoll Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 268BFE |
I absolutely LOVED this poem. The imagery and wording was simply perfect. Great write and I hope to read more from you. ~J.Lynn *¤§¤*You are born helpless...and you die helpless...*¤§¤* |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
I really loved this. Like they said before, the imagery, and the way you worded it was perfect. I really like the whole thought of the poem. It is simply beautiful. ~kissa~ **~kissa~** |
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