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Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

0 posted 2004-08-18 11:00 PM

That girl looks like a horror movie, on a small budget.
She is a car wreck, but all her bones are already broken.
And I try to bury my face away in my hands, because I feel so bad,
that she thinks she must be so thin.

Sweetest Sorrow X
Member

since 2004-01-19

Posts 146
From a cradle to a casket

1 posted 2004-08-18 11:45 PM

Wow I loved this..i keep rereading it..It was so short and simple but I also want more.
Great Write
<3
Persephone

The plaster dented from you fist..In the hall where you had your first kiss..Reminds you that the memorys wont fade

Match
Member

since 2002-07-01

Posts 286
Canada Edmonton

2 posted 2004-08-19 03:20 AM

Underneath it all there is an endless story..(ignore that)haha anyways I liked this. Very short yet full of meaning

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kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

3 posted 2004-08-19 05:32 PM

Yes, it was full of a lot of meaning. I really like it. Short but sad i guess you could say.

Karissa

DancinQueen

Senior Member

since 2000-07-29

Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA

4 posted 2004-08-21 05:22 PM

This kind of made me laugh a little, I think it was your choice of adjectives

Good write

**You can't always trust the people you want to**

Laney
Member

since 2002-12-18

Posts 85
Illinois

5 posted 2004-08-24 05:12 AM

I often come in the teen poetry (I'm 22) to remind myself of all the difficult experiences I had to go through...I'm not saying that they go away but they get a whole lot better. I really enjoyed your write...its very refreshing to see the insight you have! Good job!

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

6 posted 2004-08-24 11:47 AM

The title fit this poem perfectly. Great write. ~Jess

"When the power of love overcomes the love of power the world will know peace." -Jimi Hendrix

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

7 posted 2004-12-25 06:40 PM

Wow...i'm speechless. (in a good way! lol.)

Merry Christmas!

~Alli~

Happy Holidays!

spritrider87
Member

since 2003-05-31

Posts 294
NH

8 posted 2005-01-14 12:22 PM

its not always our fault you know. other people make us feel as if we need to be so thin. and yeah it might not look good to you. but it looks better than what i used to be. sorry about the venting. but i liked the poem. really caught my attention.

As I look at this world and realize that I am the only one to have seen the end of all Good I let the tears out that and ask the world to see them.

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