40 miles has never been so far

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Teen Poetry #7

40 miles has never been so far

EverRuss
Member

since 2003-12-31

Posts 66
Indiana

0 posted 2004-01-20 05:33 PM

This poem really means a lot to me...so does this person

I've known you for so little time,
yet i die at your parting
Dont leave me not now
You've been here to long
Im attached, You're attached
But go you shall not
We never had our moment
Our Supernova of time and space
where all our faults passions and love
cease to exsist
You mean too much now
Not just a face, place, or time
None do I need her realy amount
If i could just have you it would end
Please dont let them take you
They were young too
with silly passions but we have this
A parting kiss the lucid place apon your lips
I do not want to be forgotten
tell me you'll be back
It takes to much to forget you
Dont say those tears are in vain
Words written in a telepathic text
Tells that two have met and connected beyond relization, More congregations and many a'time
Will our paths cross.
I shall wait for you there peacefully
Now i know when i say dont leave me is just a wish
But i know we will grow
Now go leave before everything explodes
Take my smile with you and dont forget me
Dont worry, love, our time isn't over and dont cry
(this i say as inside i die)
Goodbye, love, You will always be my shooting star

p.s I tucked my heart away in your suitcase

If my poems could talk they would mean more than the words

Russell

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

1 posted 2004-01-20 07:59 PM

i like this alot. good work, much much better than alot of the stuff on here. i really liked the line that was something about lucid place or something. i dont hear that word used too much. good job!!
-alex

now im alone, but not lonely like before

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

2 posted 2004-01-20 09:39 PM

I really love this poem, especially the PS. Beautiful, thank you for sharing.

W.W.
We were meant to live for so much more have we lost ourselves?
Maybe redemption has stories to tell maybe forgiveness is right where you fell.

ascending_ecstasy
Member

since 2004-01-21

Posts 102

3 posted 2004-01-22 01:41 AM

I am not going to give any advice, good job.

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