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duncan idaho Member
since 2003-11-14
Posts 70dune |
in the unlikely event that sarcasm is an unfitting dress amnesia proletariat amnesia proletariat coughing up the coffins cottoncandy coated teeth the reflection of your enamel made no reflection in our mirror malfunction these pockets were clinching all filled with fists these decibels were rotted in the canals of my teeth amnesia proletariat amnesia proletariat sharpened on the hides of men in the full of this moon we will make amends malfunction whispered in the ear, 300 MHz edit that! you moderator gestapo! |
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Ringo 
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
This is a very decent write. I look forward to reading more. and "Moderator Gestapo"???? Geez... I'm not even German.  Cause in my dreams it's always there |
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duncan idaho Member
since 2003-11-14
Posts 70dune |
haha do you love david hasslehoff? i heard he's famous in your country |
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duncan idaho Member
since 2003-11-14
Posts 70dune |
you better run from this ink cartridge funeral. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
 @ the david H comment.....enjoyed your words..... ~*~ |
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drummerboy678 Member
since 2003-10-28
Posts 134 |
Wow dude, this is awesome. I really enjoyed some of your lines in this. Good choice of words. They all flow together and sound well together. Nice |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
We have a very special website here at PiPtalk. We encourage our members to express their personal opinions poetically, prosaically, or in discussion. We have very few hard and fast rules on these boards, but we do stand firmly in our expectation that we give our fellow members respect and tolerance at all times. Let's please remember that our moderators are here voluntarily, to ensure that everyone is able to share their work in a family-oriented environment. I'm sure that everyone will agree that profanity happens to fall short of "family-oriented," and that name-calling falls short of "respect and tolerance." Let's share our work and enjoy what others have to bring to our forums productively, shall we? |
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duncan idaho Member
since 2003-11-14
Posts 70dune |
all righty then. lets copy and paste some more crap ,Nan. I could use a good laugh. yeah, i'm sitting here writing poetry with my family? i'll go get my drug-addict father to write you a pretty poem. |
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Ron
Administrator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-05-19
Posts 8669Michigan, US |
Go ahead. But you'll have to post it somewhere else. Bye-bye. |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
I must say, this is the best poem I have read from you so far. Nice work. It's very...symbolic. |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
I liked this poem... a lot. I dont understand that whole "family-oriented" thingy. Familys do not get on the computer together and read it, and none ever really write poetry together. Maybe about eachother, but not with. Arent poems something people write with emotion, and almost all of them are how we feel. I dont think it is right to say that you cant write part of the poem, because it is not "FAmily Orientated" It is how they feel, and if you dont like it then you shouldnt read it. No one is making you. I dont mean what i say to sound rude, it is just MY opinion about it. Like i said, i liked your poem, one of your best yet actually. ~kissa~ **~kissa~** |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
kissa its all about respect, this is a family site granted we do not sit down with family members at the PC but you should consider people here family, and not to mention it is something you agreed to.....if you dont want to be a part of it, I am sure you can find somewhere else to post, however, I can bet 100% you will NOT find a site anywhere like the this!! ~*~ |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
To be more specific, kissa - Family-oriented also means that we have members of all ages reading here. Our youngest members are between 6-10, and we want them to be as comfortable readig here as our eldest nonagenarian. We don't post profanity or depict violence. It's really not any more complicated than that....  |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
yes, Im sure i wouldnt. I dont apreciate the way you said that or wrote that either. I was just stating my opinion thank you, and if i would have known you would take it so offensivley and be that rude about it, i wouldnt have wrote it. I agree that people shouldn't use profanity, i try not to anyway, and as i said before, I dont UNDERSTAND what family orientated means. I do now, but when i wrote it i didnt, and if i remember correctly, i said i didnt understad it! All i was trying to say was that i didnt understand why Nan said what she said. Oh, and thank you for telling me what it means Nan. I appreciate it. ~kissa~ **~kissa~** |
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thinktwice Member
since 2003-12-23
Posts 125United States |
i can't believe people are still arguing over the whole "family oriented" thing. it's been argued countlessly by both sides. i'm tired of reading posts with comments about the "stupid" editing of this site. if you don't like it, post somewhere else. in the mean time, lets just read and comment on people's writings. this was one of the most original writings i've read. i loved it. it reminded me of thom york's stuff for some reason, i don't know why (that's a good thing). --Adam |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
Adam- This is a very good write, and duncan was told so by numerous people. The point that you might have missed is that original version of this did not follow the guidelines that everyone agrees to when they join the site. When he was reminded about the regs, he very quickly made the needed edit, and the write did not suffer for it. After this write was revised, there were personal attacks and name-calling incidences that occured.. it was THESE that caused the discussion to be rejoined... And while you have been with Passions for four months, most of the people who are involved in this discussion and who are being asked to revise their writings are relatively new to the site, and have not seen this issue as many times as we have... I agree that everyone should just read the poetry that is posted, and reply to it, however, as long as there are people who question why a particular write was pulled, or edited, or whatever (as I did when I first had one done almost a year ago, we are, unfortunately, going to have this discussion. Cause in my dreams it's always there |
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