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Spine Grinder
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since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2004-01-15 08:02 AM



Now!
It’s okay,
I can handle this…
Walk up, say hi…
God, what a smile…
A long needed touch…

You’ve affected me worse,
Than anyone ever has before,
I can’t let this go one,
Or I know I’ll always want more.

No!
It’s not okay,
I can’t handle this…
The feelings too strong…
The love never stopped…
My tears were never truer.

If I would’ve known,
That we would end up this way,
That we would become almost strangers,
I never would have left that day..

You!
Have become the center,
For this spiral…
That keeps spinning me down…
Back into the past…
Where we weren’t lonely, but loved…

I’m so afraid of this,
Of what I’m feeling now.
And I know I should tell you,
But I’m not sure how…

I guess this will work.

"Pain is just weakness escaping the body."

© Copyright 2004 Staci Weidner - All Rights Reserved
Snickers123
Member
since 2004-05-07
Posts 94
United States-Iowa
1 posted 2004-07-16 05:10 PM


I really liked it, I'm sure a lot of people can deffinetly realate to it, keep it up!

~*.:Leah:.*~

WinterWren
Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044
...Coming to
2 posted 2004-07-17 01:07 AM


I've always liked your work, this is no exception. It really hit home hard.
The first stanza was really good, and draws you in. The rest followed up perfectly,
thanks for sharing.

WinterWren-
Counting stars wishing I was ok,
Crashing down was my biggest mistake.

Spine Grinder
Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...
3 posted 2004-07-23 07:19 AM


Thanks for the comments. I'm glad you liked it.

It's been awhile,since I've seen the way, the candles light your face. It's been a while, but I can still remember just the way you taste! ~StainD

*Alli4000*
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since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188
The World of Poetry
4 posted 2004-12-26 11:38 PM


I sure can relate...lol. Nice job!

~Alli~

Happy Holidays!

spritrider87
Member
since 2003-05-31
Posts 294
NH
5 posted 2005-01-14 12:25 PM


hey hold on. and let them know. it might not help but youll feel better. spritrider87@yahoo.com contact me whenever. hold on.

As I look at this world and realize that I am the only one to have seen the end of all Good I let the tears out that and ask the world to see them.

I_dont_know_me
Junior Member
since 2003-12-08
Posts 48
UK, Cymru
6 posted 2005-01-23 02:15 PM


was just browsing and found this it really made me think...wow thanks xxx
River
Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627
my own little world
7 posted 2005-01-25 11:12 PM


daggers...daggers in my chest. that's all I have to say, lol. (its a compliment)

        - River

How can I stand here and not be moved by you? - Lifehouse

Toasty
Member
since 2003-06-09
Posts 74
my little hole in wisconsin
8 posted 2005-01-25 11:45 PM


wow... excellent- the first stanza really sucks you in, and after that it just gets better. Thanks for sharing such a great piece of work.

~toasty

"Nothing is so strong as gentleness; Nothing so gentle as real strength."  -Francis de Sales.

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