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like a butterfly i just want to fly
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like a butterfly i just want to fly |
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Naked Truth Junior Member
since 2003-12-28
Posts 11Det, Mi. |
living am i dying or have i gave up trying am i living what we call a life or am i living death am i here, do you know? can you see me? does my beatuy appeal to deceat the eye or recreate the mind can you see right through me can you touch me? can you catch me to sat me down and caress my living dying heart can you hear me? so close to the core i could fall. without the sound of my call how do you know i need help. can you taste me? sweet or sour, do you like me am i the taste "once you pop you just cant stop"or do you pop me and then put the top on. can you feel me? my breath on ur neck or the pounding of my heart my love my obedience my respect my dedication my everything which is dying, frying, deteriorating away fighting for my life fighting to live fighting to die fighting for everything to be everything again can you feel me living for that if so... why does it feel like im dying for it? |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
can you see me? does my beatuy appeal to deceat the eye or recreate the mind i dont understand this part. it was good as a whole. the meaning was good. i think of that stuff alot. oh, try to take out frying and replace it with another word. frying just sounds kinda strange. reminds me of sci-fi. -alex now im alone, but not lonely like before |
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lilibeelee Member
since 2001-07-12
Posts 143 |
Liked this. |
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candi New Member
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2 |
good poem liked it |
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