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dinky Member
since 2002-10-19
Posts 258 |
I glance at you, You glance at me I wonder, will we ever be? You taunt me with, Your cute little grin. I know my heart, can never win. You see me, But you really don’t I want to talk, But I know I won’t. You’re too much, Of what I don’t need. |
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Snickers123 Member
since 2004-05-07
Posts 94United States-Iowa |
Hey, it wasnt bad, my advice would be to add on too it, it didnt seem like it was finished, keep it up. ~*.:Leah:.*~ |
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sweet_cute_palestinian04 Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 418Earth |
its pretty good ,i agree with snickers ,if only u would add alittle more it would be soo cute,, love and respect Fate is what controls the world so just let it go and I PROMISE YOU WILL MAKE IT!!! |
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blackandwhitehorizon Member
since 2003-05-05
Posts 183an akward state of mind |
aw it was really cute, and i love the ending, that made it awesome and a little different. |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
hey this is kinda cool, overly rhymey...but it works well. i liked the ending as well. it takes a smart person to realize that someone they may like is bad for them. nice post. bergundy "Be who you want and do what you will, in the end those who matter won't mind, and those who mind won't matter." -Dr Suess- (a brilliant man) |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
This poem is soooo cute...I loved it. I also think that you should add onto it and make it longer, but overall nice job.  ~Alli~ |
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dinky Member
since 2002-10-19
Posts 258 |
hey i really appreciate all the advice and everyone taking time to read my poem! ~sam~ |
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