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Teen Poetry #7

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RedDiamond1307
Junior Member

since 2004-01-05

Posts 20

0 posted 2004-01-10 11:23 PM

Painful, cruel, and unforgiving,
ruthless lust, constant reliving,
Distaste, mistrust, and hopeless dreams,
It will not end, or so it seems.

It won't get better, its not a phase,
a vile, wicked, misleading maze.
Good hopes in vain, it can't come true,
misplaced faith, put all in you.

I will not deem, it can't be right,
I've fought too hard to feel this spite,
And still I see it deep inside,
this feelings strong, its hard to hide.

I thought it out, and I was sure,
But now I feel so insecure,
This is the end, I won't advance,
I can only hope for a hollow glance.

xEmperorEmber
Member

since 2000-03-28

Posts 136
tx

1 posted 2004-01-11 07:54 PM

good write, i liked the rhyming scheme and organization. The topic was pretty decent too.

Paul

lilibeelee
Member

since 2001-07-12

Posts 143

2 posted 2004-01-11 09:19 PM

Very well done.

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

3 posted 2004-01-11 10:21 PM

Nice. It's sad. I really liked it. It flowed really well. I hope to hear more.

**~kissa~**
*I wanna be a little more like me, and a little less like YOU!*~ Linkin Park

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