Untitled (I know a catchy title gets more replies, but oh well)

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Teen Poetry #7

Untitled (I know a catchy title gets more replies, but oh well)

CwboyAtHeart
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA

0 posted 2004-01-09 11:59 PM

Certainly not one of my best pieces, but again, I've had some nasty writers block I'm trying to overcome. Let me know how bad this piece is... lol Criticism is appreciated here as I know that this one needs some help.

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I sit here with my pen
Writing for lack of anything else to do
That will soften the pain
Of the times that I have shared with you

As my tears fall on this paper
The blue lines together fade
As the page turns blue, it's remniscent
Of all the memories that we have made

Here I am at this table
Im so lonely, but not alone
I hope you know how much I love you
And I'm waiting for you to come home

- C.K. Natland -

Nobody Is Perfect Until You Fall In Love With Them.

Michelle_loves_Mike

Senior Member

since 2003-12-20

Posts 1189
Pennsylvania

1 posted 2004-01-10 12:09 PM

"Im so lonely, but not alone"
....been there,,was there for many years,,,,lonely in a crowd,,,,good write,,,,,if this is with a block....can't wait to see you writing inspired,,,
Michelle

I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike

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