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Thenumber7 New Member
since 2004-01-07
Posts 5 |
Ego Listen I’m screaming You can’t hear a word It’s coming from below Oh wait absurd You can’t even see me I’m not even there I assure you I am But your nose is in the air You’re on another level Above us all I’m the one that you stepped on One day you will fall It must be nice You know to be in the top caste Put before everyone While I sit in last You work half as hard But get twice as far It doesn’t make sense But hey you’re a star It’s not what you know But rather who My day will come But I won’t step on you I’ll just saw down your ladder Look you eye to eye Try to see for myself What got you so high I’ll then walk away But surly I’ll grin Because when we become equal Is the moment I win |
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the_fortress Junior Member
since 2003-12-31
Posts 28 |
I enjoyed this, but I am not sure what it's about. Maybe you could clear it up. I think it's about your being confident of yourself? Something along those lines? |
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Thenumber7 New Member
since 2004-01-07
Posts 5 |
its about the people in life that get by through doing nothing, while others work hard and get less. But in the end, hard work pays off when the person with the ego fails, and you surpass them. |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
Welcome to pip! I really enjoyed this, the begining threw me off a little bit cause it was a little choppy but overall the poem was beautiful and your meaning is a very good one, hard work always pays off and good things come to those who wait. Lovely first post I hope you have a long happy stay here with us! Check your email for a specail note! ~Live and Laugh~ Because of you I laugh a little harder, smile a little more, and cry a little less |
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ascending_ecstasy Member
since 2004-01-21
Posts 102 |
ahhh rhyming.... i like rhyming... keep it up. |
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Michelle_loves_Mike
since 2003-12-20
Posts 1189Pennsylvania |
Welcome to Passions I'm not much into rhyming ,,but this works Michelle I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike |
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