Teen Poetry #7 |
The Unspoken |
Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
The Unspoken Our hearts were together, For such a short time, Or so it seems… Time freezes, As I stand in front of you, Waiting for an answer…. That shall never be spoken. Our hearts must now divide, As our time together is over, Or so it seems… Time freezes, As I stand in front of you, Waiting for an answer…. That shall never be spoken. A happy ending, We shall never receive, But all is well – We still have our times. Time… It freezes… As I… Stand in front of you… Waiting… For an answer That shall never be spoken. I guess that means… I’ll be waiting forever, For you. Tell me, how does it feel, to treat me like you do?~Orgy |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
i really liked the whole thing. the only part that i didnt much was this Time… It freezes… As I… Stand in front of you… Waiting… For an answer That shall never be spoken. i just didnt like all the ... i thought i broke the flow of the poem. good work overall though |
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