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Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2004-01-06 03:35 PM

Why can’t you whisper,
Why can’t you see me,
What can’t you feel me,
Like before?
Then I remember,
You don’t love me anymore.
Is that true?
Or is it all a show,
To hide how you really feel?
I guess I’ll never know….
Unless you tell me.
God, I miss you so much….
Why can’t you see that?
The sight, the sound, the smell,
The thought, the love…
From you….I need you

I just need to know…
Do you hate me?
Do you love me?
Or do you just not care at all?
A touch, a sigh, a laugh,
A smile, a tear…
From you…I want you.

I close my eyes,
And remember all the times we had,
Good and bad,
But they’re just memories,
I don’t want memories.
A word, a hug, an answer,
A letter, a kiss….
From you….I want you,
To need me.

Tell me, how does it feel, to treat me like you do?~Orgy

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

1 posted 2004-01-06 09:27 PM

I close my eyes,
And remember all the times we had,
Good and bad,
But they’re just memories,
I don’t want memories.
A word, a hug, an answer,
A letter, a kiss….
From you….I want you,
To need me.

those were the best lines. it wasnt as good as you're other stuff, but still decent.

lilibeelee
Member

since 2001-07-12

Posts 143

2 posted 2004-01-11 08:59 PM

I like this one good job

SilentTears
Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

3 posted 2004-01-12 11:33 AM

I really liked this one, very good job.

*I figured out that trust was just my one mistake...*

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

4 posted 2004-01-12 04:45 PM

I can relate to this one right now. Very good job, thanks for sharing.

W.W.
We were meant to live for so much more have we lost ourselves?
Maybe redemption has stories to tell maybe forgiveness is right where you fell.

frolicking dolphin
Member

since 2003-02-23

Posts 268
my own special world

5 posted 2004-01-12 05:41 PM

Nice write, I really liked the lines:
"I just need to know…
Do you hate me?
Do you love me?
Or do you just not care at all?
A touch, a sigh, a laugh,
A smile, a tear…
From you…I want you."
I can really relate to it, nice work

~*~Karen~*~

~You can close your eyes to things that you don’t want to see, but you can’t close your heart to things you don’t want to feel~

broken627
Member

since 2003-11-26

Posts 66
Eugene Oregon

6 posted 2004-01-12 07:40 PM

wow this was beautiful i can relate so much!thanks for sharing!

sweet_lost_palestinian1
Member

since 2004-01-08

Posts 90

7 posted 2004-01-12 08:00 PM

reallly really goood keep it up and keep writing more and more i want to hear from u more.............

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