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Teen Poetry #7

All in Vein

Shari
New Member

since 2004-01-03

Posts 3

0 posted 2004-01-03 05:38 PM

All in Vain

When others said leave you alone
I kept pushing on
When others said stop trying
I kept crying
When others said you were happy where you are
I kept loving you from afar
When others said you didn't want me
I vowed to prove them wrong continously
When others said I couldn't get you back
I proved them wrong for a fact.
Now I wonder was my pushing in vein
cause now I'm crying, tears falling down like the rain.
Now I'm wondering was my loving you so wrong
cause you pushed my love away with a force so strong
Now I'm wondering did I prove them wrong for nothing
cause now I'm having a hard time coping
Now I wonder why did I want you back
cause now there's definately something I lack.
I guess my devotion was all in vain
and now you're driving me insane.
I can't believe you don't seem to care
after all the love you said we'd share
Maybe this is something I'm just gonna have to take
and I see my loving you was all a big mistake.

Shari
New Member

since 2004-01-03

Posts 3

1 posted 2004-01-03 05:40 PM

Hey seeing how this works!!!

*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

2 posted 2004-01-04 03:24 AM

Sigh...I'm sorry for your pain, heartache is always hard to bear. The poem itself was good, nice flow, very direct ryhme pattern and you got your emotions across nicely. well done.
~Live and Laugh~

Because of you I laugh a little harder, smile a little more, and cry a little less
~Bella~

the_fortress
Junior Member

since 2003-12-31

Posts 28

3 posted 2004-01-04 03:27 AM

Very well done!

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