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Teen Poetry #7

Ask her

OO_the_irish_one
New Member

since 2003-12-29

Posts 4
Cali

0 posted 2003-12-29 10:19 PM

Ask , She will tell

Sitting here
Body? Warm?
Only because i am smoothed
By the “love” of
So many
Got a blanket around my shoulders
Skin is colder then ice,
Finger frost bitten
Nails harder then you cold heart
Bitch
Wait.....
Warmth i feel it
i can’t say were,
Weak ... but there
Above the legs,
But below the head
.......
Could it be my heart?
This thing that stopped working so
Many year ago,
Yet i feel it,
Yes my heart.
Reaching out to you
Trying to get you
Trying to touch your heart

Well that is a fine thing indeed
Now I feel better.

[This message has been edited by *Belabebeautiful* (12-30-2003 03:13 AM).]

*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

1 posted 2003-12-30 02:22 AM

Hello there and welcome to piptalk! I hope that you have a pleasant stay with us. Nicely done fist post, it just comes out and smacks you with emotion. I really enjoyed this piece though I couldn't exactly put my finger on what exactly about it made it so wonderful in my head. Overall nicely done. check your email for a little note.
~Live and Laugh~

Because of you I laugh a little harder, smile a little more, and cry a little less
~Bella~

OO_the_irish_one
New Member

since 2003-12-29

Posts 4
Cali

2 posted 2003-12-31 01:49 PM

thank you very much

Star T
Member

since 2002-07-12

Posts 182
Philadelphia, US

3 posted 2003-12-31 04:22 PM

great first post!

the_fortress
Junior Member

since 2003-12-31

Posts 28

4 posted 2003-12-31 06:38 PM

I really enjoyed your poem. I look forward to your future posts. I could relate to the poem also. It was kind os strange.

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