Teen Poetry #7 |
I hate it. |
kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
This poem was written when i was really really mad, so i had to edit it, so if some things sound korny, sorry. I dont want to feel like this! I hate you You cause so much freakin* pain I cant deal with this edit . I hate the way you smile and i forget all the pain you've caused me! I hate the way you say "I love you" and nothing else freaking* matters! You shouldn't be able to get away with all the edit you pull! You shouldn't be able to say "I love you cuz i know it's all bull! YOu shouldn't impact my life so much, my world revolves around you, and it shouldn't be! You're not worth all this screwed* up pain you cause! but i just cant seem to let you go, and I HATE IT! [This message has been edited by *Belabebeautiful* (12-30-2003 02:54 AM).] |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
ahhh...I hate you rants, yes I have several of those myself. thank you for editing your poem accordingly for it has very good emotion that should not be hindered my vulgar speech. Overall nicely done. ~Live and Laugh~ Because of you I laugh a little harder, smile a little more, and cry a little less |
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OO_the_irish_one New Member
since 2003-12-29
Posts 4Cali |
i say beat him up Dempsey |
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LegalSecret69 Member
since 2003-06-04
Posts 69Virginia |
I know how you feel... and the poem doesn't sound korny, even after edited. You really let your emotions out, and it can be recognized in this poem. Keep writing...it'll help things pass..or at least it works for me. But anyhow.. Good job! |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
thanks for all your comments! I really appreciate them. I hope to hear more. ~kissa~ |
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crystalclearpoems Junior Member
since 2003-12-30
Posts 16 |
very good poem! i know what you were going through then and its great how you can let it out through poetry! |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
I hate feeling that way too! And I've had it happen often enough. ~sky Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone... |
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the_fortress Junior Member
since 2003-12-31
Posts 28 |
Some people don't derserve to say I love you.. They won't mean it and do it for stupid things. Thats what I got out of the poem anyways... Don't abuse love. It could make you great, or ruin you. Depending on how you use it. |
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Toasty Member
since 2003-06-09
Posts 74my little hole in wisconsin |
definitely not corny. this is an emotional piece, and a good one at that. keep up the good work, and thanks for editing. :0) *toasty* |
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broken627 Member
since 2003-11-26
Posts 66Eugene Oregon |
i loved this poem i felt i could relate alot.your very talented-*--also it definetly was not corny-*- -*-Broken627-*- |
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frolicking dolphin Member
since 2003-02-23
Posts 268my own special world |
I think this is a poem we can all relate to, atleast sometime in our life. You showed your emotions really well, nice work ~*~Karen~*~ |
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Sweetpoet16m4u04 Member
since 2002-11-10
Posts 153Ma, U.S.A |
Great job kissa!! I can honestly say that yeah i felt that about a girl i liked here and there. Look forward to hearing more keep up the good work hun! |
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Star T Member
since 2002-07-12
Posts 182Philadelphia, US |
alright now that was nice.best part was i totally related to it and when i felt that way..so many times,i was THAT angry.what surprised me though is how many ppl who posted replies said they had felt this way one time or the other.could it be that people misunderstand love?or simply that love isnt always sweet? |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
Love isnt always sweet i think. People say that love is forever, but i disagree. I mean true love, yeah, its foreevr, but love, or atleast waht you might think is love, i am not so sure. Sometimes you think you love someone, when it is just lust, all just a game. I dont know, i dont event think i am making any sense. whatever. Thanks fo rall your comments. ~kissa~ |
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*bleeding 4 eternity* Junior Member
since 2005-07-16
Posts 10Alabama, U.S. |
I like it. I feel the same way right now. |
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Match Member
since 2002-07-01
Posts 286Canada Edmonton |
Oh la la that was full of anger, it sounds like it sucks. Good write Im sorry i've failed you all. |
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