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...I'll Never See Your Face...
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...I'll Never See Your Face... |
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A.L Member
since 2003-03-15
Posts 131
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...I'll Never See Your Face... Close my eyes and picture it all Rewind back to that night To where I didn't even know you Where your eyes never met mine Before that first word was spoken Back to where I still believed Before that first conversation Back to before you ever ignored me Rewind the things you've said Before all of the dreams Erase meaningless promises Rewind hopeless feelings Back to where I wouldn't pick you out in a crowd Back to before I waited for you to call Before I memorized your number Before we lost it all Retrace every thought, every word Every kiss that ever went wrong Rewind every song we ever shared Take me back to where this never belonged Where I never learned how to hate you Back to when you were never by my side Before every mean thing I said Before every tear I cried Before my heart ever felt you Before I knew your name Rewind all the smiles framed in my mind Rewind all the chances I gave I close my eyes and rewind to that night Picture your hat still covering your face Where never a word was spoken And where you'd already be erased... I see me frowning in your eyes... |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
How happy is the blameless vestals' lot, the world forgetting by the world forgot. Eternal sunshine of the spotless mind! Each pray'r accepted, and each wish resign'd. (Alexander Pope) This made me think of that quote. |
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A.L Member
since 2003-03-15
Posts 131 |
wow I love that quote! I see me frowning in your eyes... |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
This is something I believe we all go through at a point in our lives, you wrote very well of this feeling of wanting to erase it all. Very vivid emotion...Defenitly beautiful writing, back up to the top with you! ~Live and Laugh~ Don't look to me for perfection for I will surely let you down. |
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Riley
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
this reminds me...sadly. of me. yea. but it was really good. i enjoyed it! thanks for the read. <3* always ri no matter what i'll always love you |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
Reminds me of how I feel, too. Sort of like what I would write, except your poem isn't as restricted by rhyme. I really liked this, and yeah, it is something we all go through sooner or later. Too bad we can never go back. Loved this poem, too. This site really is full of talented writers. Winamp is Playing: "The Way You Like It" Adema Adema is knowing where I've been ~Rich~ |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
omg...alison...this is an amazing poem...i am just speechless. The flow and rhyming schemes are awesome and I can so relate to the poem. This is poem is a  and is going in my library!  ~Alli~ P.S. You've got some cool name.  lol.*:.AIM = Alli4000.:* My Journal Don’t cry because it’s over, smile because it happened... |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
of course...typical me...i forgot to hit the 'add thread to library button'.  *click* |
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WranglrButts9 Member
since 2004-10-24
Posts 108Iowa, US |
This is a poem that I can REALLLY relate to. I just broke up with a boyfriend of seven months and have been thinking about him even more than when we were going out. The whole poem flows great, and painted a vivid picture in my mind. Great write! Bailey Good judgment comes from experience, |
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A.L Member
since 2003-03-15
Posts 131 |
Thank you all for reading I'm glad you can relate...I see me frowning in your eyes... |
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*bleeding 4 eternity* Junior Member
since 2005-07-16
Posts 10Alabama, U.S. |
this is an amazing poem!! I really enjoyed it. Thanks for the reading |
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