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Teen Poetry #7

Hope

Baby D
Junior Member

since 2003-10-26

Posts 14

0 posted 2003-12-24 04:34 AM

feeling the pressure more the ever,
falling apart so quietly,
shouldn't have done it from the start,
shouldn't have taken it all to heart,
tried to take it all in stride,
tried to handle it myself,
but things are getting harder to hide.
i thought i could make it through,
if i held my head high,
thought i could keep walking,
but it's weighing me down,
drowning me slow,
don't know if i can cope,
but all i can do is try,
all i've got left is hope.

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

1 posted 2003-12-24 03:27 PM

it sounds like a linkin park song. the rhyming was......bad. it sounds like very early writings. keep working at this stuff, get a nit more imaginitive and you will get better.
-alex

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