Teen Poetry #7 |
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one week |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN ![]() |
One Week Seven days to miss your caring touch, An eternity of you being far away, A lifetime of realizing that i love you so much, I'll try and last you being gone for seven days. Seven reasons for me to cry And cover my tears with my hands, When you pull them away and look in my eyes, You look at a boy who wants to be a man. Seven hash marks on my wall Count down the days until your return, I use my tears to write them all Under flourescent lights that burn. Seven songs on my radio Speaking of anothers lost heart, the singers hont that they know The joy of finding love's start. Seven aged wishes that i quietly keep, they are not so secret or anything brand new, "i wish you were here." I whisper even in my sleep, I've told you now, but i hope it still comes true. Seven days to miss your caring touch, You seem to be falling further away, A lifetime realizing that i love you so much, I'll try and last you being gone for seven days... now im alone, but not lonely like before |
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skyshine![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Hope the week goes by soon. ![]() ~sky Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone... |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
thanks....i guess.....heres something i need to say about the mods....they always try and be too encouraging, like the comment that was just posted told me nothing about my poem. i post becuase i write poems, not becuase i need someone to tell me "i hope the week goes by quick" or whatever. comment on the poem, not on how i should feel better or some crap like that. thank you ![]() -alex |
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muchos Member
since 2003-11-29
Posts 102 |
this poem shows true love, and a yearning to be with someone. i guess expression through words will say alot, or even more so through a torn up soul. i like your work and i relate, besides, poetry comes from the heart, theres no good and theres no bad, but you....yours is great!! [This message has been edited by muchos (01-03-2004 04:18 PM).] |
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