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Teen Poetry #7

its sad

wishing on a star
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since 2003-12-03

Posts 19
sleeping in my warm bed =)

0 posted 2003-12-03 09:49 PM

Its sad to want the thing you can never have
Hold it close while you can never let it go
If you do it might disappear forever
You really can never know
You never wanna lose your grasp
So hold it close and keep it dear
You dont wanna lose a great thing
The thing that is now so far was once oh so near

[This message has been edited by wishing on a star (12-04-2003 07:50 AM).]

Match
Member

since 2002-07-01

Posts 286
Canada Edmonton

1 posted 2003-12-03 10:13 PM

I like it, but it really bothers me in poetry when you use "u" instead of you. Just my thoughts though,
-ash

I know you think that I shouldnt still love you
I'll tell you that
But if I didn't say it
Well, I'd still have felt it
Where's the sense in tha

wishing on a star
Junior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 19
sleeping in my warm bed =)

2 posted 2003-12-04 07:53 AM

sorry that was an accident!! I edited it though!!!
*~me*~

frolicking dolphin
Member

since 2003-02-23

Posts 268
my own special world

3 posted 2003-12-04 05:22 PM

Short, but very nice, this actually encouraged me to regrasp something I lost about a year ago, nice work

~*~Karen~*~

~All our dreams can come true, if we have the courage to pursue them~Walt Disney

broken627
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since 2003-11-26

Posts 66
Eugene Oregon

4 posted 2003-12-04 10:41 PM

Hey this was great yet short...Id love to hear more of your poetry!
-*-broken627-*-

wishing on a star
Junior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 19
sleeping in my warm bed =)

5 posted 2003-12-05 08:29 AM

thanx everyone!! I will try to post again soon!!
*~Me*~

young naive & vulnerable to the world

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