»
Archives
»
Teen Poetry #7
»
Trust
| Teen Poetry #7 |
|
Trust |
|
|
kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
This is a poem about the trust that can be destroyed because some people don't know how to keep their mouth shut! You say that i can talk to you, and that your here for me. That you want to build a relationship, built on trust, love and serenity. How that can ever happen now, I cant seem to see. When i finally try, ' to build a relationship with you, you turn around and make it harder than it has to be. I tell you my secrets, my hopes, my dreams, My most inner feelings, My soul is yours to see. I ask you not to tell, I don't want them to know. I trust you to keep them, between you and me. I thought everything was going great, I was happy as could be. Then i found out, you'd told someone. I felt hurt, mad and angry. That was a while ago, I'm not as hurt as i used to be. But now when you ask me, to talk to you, I simply walk away, I tell you to leave me be, I have no trust in you, left in me. |
||
| © Copyright 2003 Karissa - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
duncan idaho Member
since 2003-11-14
Posts 70dune |
i think you do not need an introduction. It's a good poem and you should let it speak for itself. |
||
|
Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
This was good. Like ^^^ said, it speaks for itself, and doesn't need an introduction. Well done. Tell me, how does it feel, to treat me like you do?~Orgy |
||
|
THE-1-U-DISLIKE Junior Member
since 2003-11-07
Posts 20 |
thanks so much for your words realy great job |
||
|
frolicking dolphin Member
since 2003-02-23
Posts 268my own special world |
I think we've all been hurt atleast once in our lives, this poem demonstrates this hurt really well, nice work ~*~Karen~*~ |
||
|
kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
Thank you all for your comments. I appreciate it. I hope to hear more. **~kissa~** |
||
|
broken627 Member
since 2003-11-26
Posts 66Eugene Oregon |
Great work!I could really relate i cant wait to hear more!:-) Great job! -*-Broken627-*- |
||
|
Darker Season Junior Member
since 2004-04-01
Posts 48Wisconsin |
Nice poem. You couldn't have put this theme into words and better than this. It was perfect. I've lost track of the times in my life I've fealt these emotions and it was great to see someone capture it on paper so honestly. Peace Andrew |
||
|
Sweetpoet16m4u04 Member
since 2002-11-10
Posts 153Ma, U.S.A |
Hey again hun, If you really want to know how greatly i think of you you need to read my response to your other poem. This one was another finely written piece by you cause u have such a great talent. Feel free to talk to me ill be there for you!! Hugs, Chris |
||
|
kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
Aww. you are tooo sweet. Thanks. I love seein your comments on my poems. I'll be looking 4 ur next poem!!! ~kissa~ I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
||
|
sweet_cute_palestinian04 Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 418Earth |
gr888 poem i reallly enjoyed readding it .....i know how u feel believe me people these dayz r never trusted ][\this generation especiallyyyyyyyyy.. ::^love^:: |
||
|
WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
As everyone else said, "great job". I really like this, I think it's a topic alot of people can relate to. Thanks for sharing. W.W. |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
