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Teen Poetry #7

familiar emotion

Ally Stone
Junior Member

since 2003-10-20

Posts 48
D.C.

0 posted 2003-11-30 03:52 PM

The animal that crawls
and stalks me often;
An excess of emotion bringing

Tears to (my) eyes
Smiles and tears to flow- in this
groove we go, a bitter

rut, a root to scrape, a cut to
heal. Running fast from
the parasite,

a tenant here,
Devouring flesh underneath the
skin, forcing weakness to

Shimmer at the sight of it, bringing
sweat to my brow, knowing all to well
the familiar strains and

Chords. Oh sweet melody,
churning in me bringing out that pleasant
Ache, cringing with the beauty of it,

As with a swollen sound,
I faint into love.

wvplayernotreally
Member

since 2002-11-06

Posts 215
yakima wa

1 posted 2003-11-30 04:00 PM

Such an amazing write. I was unsure about it but once i got about one fourth through it i loved it. Last two lines were amazing. I love your style

" I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking."

broken627
Member

since 2003-11-26

Posts 66
Eugene Oregon

2 posted 2003-11-30 04:05 PM

great write i cant wait to hear more!
-*-broken627-*-

pammy
Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 50
California

3 posted 2003-12-05 09:12 PM

i really like the way u portryaed falling in love
good job

frolicking dolphin
Member

since 2003-02-23

Posts 268
my own special world

4 posted 2003-12-08 06:14 PM

I really liked this, it was really well thought out and was a perfect portrayel of love. nice work

~*~Karen~*~

~All our dreams can come true, if we have the courage to pursue them~Walt Disney

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