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Teen Poetry #7

But why.....

rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

0 posted 2006-09-01 03:10 AM

you taught me how to be cruel
but why do I feel like such a fool
You made me suffer for all Your pain
but why is it me who feels the shame

you gossiped, like no one else
but why do I wish I had said
"Just stop, “to you, you silenced my voice
but why do I still think that I had a choice

I idolized you, yet you didn't care
after I tell you, why do you call unfair
you tell me rumors hurt
but why do I get the feeling, you'd use any words

to get a sweet revenge
this is now, that was then
you hate him cause he broke your heart
but why do I think he's still a big part

of who you are
even when you go to far
but why do I feel bad
not telling you things, Why am I sad?

you twisted me around for way too long
but why couldn't I have just been strong
never again will you trick me into your guilt.
live your own life; I've already had my fill.

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

1 posted 2006-09-01 09:01 PM

Very emotional poem you've written here. I enjoyed it, but I would just suggest going back and editing, maybe fixing capitalzation and punctuation. It would make your poem easier to read and will help get your message across.

Once again, nice job, keep writing!

~Alli~

again.on.death.row
New Member

since 2008-05-08

Posts 9
Canada

2 posted 2008-05-08 09:03 PM

heyy really great capturing that fiesty angry feeling that comes with being pushed around by a friend. I've been there, good job on writing it down.

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