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bekahlekah45
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since 2006-03-14

Posts 533

0 posted 2006-08-28 08:04 PM

You think you know me
But do you?
You say you understand me
Are you sure?

I put on a new face everyday
how could you know me?
i dont understand myself
so how could you possibly?

The life i lead is nothing but fake
every move i make is another mistake
I wish i could fix everything in the
next breath i take

All the lies, all the deciet
what will it take to get me back on my feet?
I've done so much damage can it ever be fixed
Why did i ever get myself into all of this

But tomorrow's a new day
and forever changed will I be
I'll be a better person
And everyone will see.

uhh this deff turned out like crap! oh well!

the_girl_next_door
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since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

1 posted 2006-08-28 10:02 PM

The poem I think could be worded a little differently to sound more interesting but I really loved the last stanza bc I can relate

~heather~

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

2 posted 2006-08-29 12:08 PM

i liked this poem it was good...wow i can relate to some parts too

thanks for sharing...
hunnie*

A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your
heart.

bekahlekah45
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since 2006-03-14

Posts 533

3 posted 2006-08-29 04:58 PM

ty : )

stargal
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since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

4 posted 2006-08-30 09:00 AM

Hiya bekah!

I'm not sure I would call this one of your bests but it was very good. The general idea of the poem was awesome; like the idea of putting on a new face everyday, I loved that part, it was so true, yet, not what I was thinking of as part of the poem?

Anyway, I'ma go to work then go to bed so ttyl

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
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bekahlekah45
Senior Member

since 2006-03-14

Posts 533

5 posted 2006-08-30 03:26 PM

lol remember when we were talking and i told you "man this is turning out like crap"
haha this is what i was referring too!

thanks for the comment : )

Tempest
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since 2006-04-28

Posts 247
dont eat paint chips!!!!

6 posted 2006-08-30 10:01 PM

Gont listen to them, they dont know...anyways this was GREAT GREAT STUFF YOU CRAZY CRAZY LITTLE FRIEND

bekahlekah45
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since 2006-03-14

Posts 533

7 posted 2006-08-31 03:43 PM

lol thanks tempest

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

8 posted 2006-09-03 07:57 PM

"i dont understand myself
so how could you possibly?"

I think I could really relate to these lines myself.
Anyhow, maybe this isn't one of your best writings, but overall it's a very good poem. Keep it up!

~Alli~

mgoodman1989
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since 2006-03-05

Posts 93
Iowa, USA

9 posted 2006-09-04 05:08 PM

"All the lies, all the deciet
what will it take to get me back on my feet?
I've done so much damage can it ever be fixed
Why did i ever get myself into all of this

But tomorrow's a new day
and forever changed will I be
I'll be a better person
And everyone will see"

Definately my favorite part. I can really really relate to this stuff, because I've been there, Today is my tomorrow.

Keep Posting Bekah,

Much love,
Michelle

*I love him oh yes I do, he's for me and not for you, and if by chance you take my place, I'll take my fist and smash your face!*

bekahlekah45
Senior Member

since 2006-03-14

Posts 533

10 posted 2006-09-05 04:49 PM

mucho gracias for the feedback!
im happy to know you guys take the time to read my poetry : )

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