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buttercupbaby
Member

since 2006-05-03

Posts 400
outside in the rain

0 posted 2006-08-22 07:29 PM

i bet you don't know
how much you mean to me
i bet you don't know
that at night i see you in my dreams.

sometimes i laugh at myself
for wanting so much
but the only thing i actually want
is something that i can't touch.

i know it sounds funny
through every single tear
i know its weird
that your voice is the only one i hear

the only voice i comfort in
is yours, such a sweet melody
but its the only one
that also breaks and crushes me.

i know its stuipd to love you still
i should be in such pain
i know you know that you hurt me
you left such a crimson stain.

the only thing i want
and can't touch
that hurts me so so much
is your cold cold dark
heart.

buttercupbaby
Member

since 2006-05-03

Posts 400
outside in the rain

1 posted 2006-08-22 07:29 PM

don't even try to make me feel good about this one, i just sat down and wrote it.
wow, this has got to be the worse one ever written.

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

2 posted 2006-08-22 10:18 PM

i know its stuipd to love you still
i should be in such pain
i know you know that you hurt me
you left such a crimson stain.

THis is my favorite stanza.. i really like how you described this.

~Heather~

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

3 posted 2006-08-23 04:45 AM

same i really loved this stanza

i know its stuipd to love you still
i should be in such pain
i know you know that you hurt me
you left such a crimson stain.

i liked the feel of the poem, it described pretty well the feelings in this

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

4 posted 2006-08-23 10:51 AM

"sometimes i laugh at myself
for wanting so much
but the only thing i actually want
is something that i can't touch."

My favorite stanza! It was wonderful, it IS wonderful, it describes me, wanting things that I can't have, loved it

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
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buttercupbaby
Member

since 2006-05-03

Posts 400
outside in the rain

5 posted 2006-08-25 12:35 PM

well, thanks y'all! i didn't think it was that great but thats ok!
thanks alot, i love y'all replies=)
-missy

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