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Teen Poetry #7

Tears

Abiola
Junior Member

since 2006-08-09

Posts 29

0 posted 2006-08-21 04:32 AM

Tears drip from my eyes

down into the sea

Don't know how to stop them

want to but can't

Don't know what to do anymore.

I can't stop cryin

Is it because my life is falling apart?

Or am I lettin it fall apart?

No more the person I used to be

Wait!!!!!!!!!! I never was that person

I'm lost now

I really am

Help is what I need

But denial is what I do best

Hey what can I say?

I guess nothing

Life is just passing me by

But in my eyes the wrong way

Abiola

mgoodman1989
Member

since 2006-03-05

Posts 93
Iowa, USA

1 posted 2006-08-21 05:27 PM

Confusing. Different. But very neat. Good Job.

cherrys_rule
Member

since 2006-03-18

Posts 442

2 posted 2006-08-21 06:40 PM

i didn't think it was confusing at all. Yes different, but not confusing. I liked it though. I thought you did a great job on this.

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

3 posted 2006-08-21 07:43 PM

I liked this one a lot! It was kind of like you were talking with yourself, arguing with yourself. I thought that the form in this was wonderful. The way you expressed yourself was really good.

I can sort of relate.

Thanks for sharing!

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
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