»
Archives
»
Teen Poetry #7
»
how blurred is your pain
| Teen Poetry #7 |
|
how blurred is your pain |
|
|
gozaggss Junior Member
since 2006-04-26
Posts 33 |
How blurred is your pain? Are you even hurting? The stitches have fallen off The scars aren’t even there Are you faking this pain? Is this for attention? Can’t tell if you’re lying Don’t know if it’s true Are you lying this time? Are you telling the truth? I shouldn’t believe you Even just this once Why won’t I believe you? Why would I turn? You’re the boy who cried “wolf” I long stopped listening I’d leave you to die? Can you expire from apparitional pain? You’re never the victim It’s all a façade Like your fake boyfriend, and your fake cough You’re just a fake. Abscond to whichever crevasse you sprang from You make even the young die with your listlessness |
||
| © Copyright 2006 gozaggss - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
tapper798 Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 353My own world |
I like this :] I know a few people like this, it's pretty frustrating. As for the poem, you definitly got your point across. Some parts repeated the previous line, that would be the only critique is to maybe try and change it up a bit so it isn't redundant in one area. Great write, hope to see more from you! myspace username-beautiful_tragidy |
||
|
cherrys_rule Member
since 2006-03-18
Posts 442 |
I like this one alot. It reminds me of a couple ppl that I know. man I love your words that you put in this poem. You did a great job on this I hope to see more from you in the future. Thanks for sharing. |
||
|
stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Well, as everyone said above, I also loved this one! I believe that I liked this one so much because, like others said, you know people like this, who drive you insane! You got your feelings across the the reader very well. Awesome job in writing this poem. Thanks for sharing!  "I pray thee, O God, that I |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
