Teen Poetry #7 |
I Cant Breathe |
Tempest Member
since 2006-04-28
Posts 247dont eat paint chips!!!! |
Slow down I cant breathe And you know its killing me To watch you sit And shake your head Refusing to admit To all you said Save it for the saints Because they can listen to your stalling Ive fell too much And now im done with falling Slow down I cant breathe And you know its killing me When you act like I dont matter Just because You know it makes me madder I cant breathe I cant breathe Too long its hurt me I cant breathe |
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cherrys_rule Member
since 2006-03-18
Posts 442 |
I really like this from you. It's really good. I loved it. |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
i agree i really liked this too... Krysti* A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
"Slow down I cant breathe And you know its killing me To watch you sit And shake your head Refusing to admit To all you said" Wow... This stanza was my favorite in the whole poem! The flow, the wording, I enjoyed all of it. I felt like you did a more than excellent job with this poem and I can't wait to see what you come up with next. I think that this is one of my favorites by you; I liked how you compared this to "falling". Awesome job! Thanks for sharing "I pray thee, O God, that I |
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