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Teen Poetry #7

stormy weather

Cinderelly
Member

since 2001-12-31

Posts 189
NM, USA

0 posted 2006-08-12 07:57 PM

Stuck choosing between the past and the present
caught in the eye of the storm
emotions swirling and feelings rising
the hurricane of my heart.

As the first rain fell
the past came into play
while the present was left unaware.

Lightning struck today
when the phone rang.

* Be happy for this moment. This moment is your life *

CrAzI_bAbI_cHiKa
Member

since 2003-07-16

Posts 248

1 posted 2006-08-12 08:03 PM

awww wickked cute. i liked this a lot

When I'm good, I'm very good. But when I'm bad I'm better.
Mae West

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

2 posted 2006-08-13 01:42 AM

YoW! Talk about an unexpected ending! I loved this, it wasn’t what I thought it was at first which was a nice surprise. Poems that have twists in them, like this one, are always awesome in my book.

I felt like you did an more than excellent job with this and I hope that you will post more soon

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
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buttercupbaby
Member

since 2006-05-03

Posts 400
outside in the rain

3 posted 2006-08-13 07:01 AM

awesome!
this was awesome! i loved how you made the comparison! you might not know, but that is my favorite thing like, ever! i love when people compare stuff to stuff they're feeling, i usually do that, but honestly, i don't think i've come close to how good this is!!!!!

i loveddd it
-missy

broken_smile1469
Member

since 2006-07-02

Posts 104

4 posted 2006-08-13 04:58 PM

hey i agree with everyone else GREAT poem! i loved it

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